Posted by annagbds4 | Posted in Language Arts | Posted on December 20, 2013
It was a chilly Christmas Eve. I was cozy under my blankets downstairs. I was too excited about Christmas that I was wide awake. I must of have fallen asleep, when I heard a strange noise coming from the rooftop? Then I heard it again thump … thump and bells jingling. Really could it be? Did I hear Santa Claus?
I quietly tiptoed from my bed and slowly crept down the stairs. I looked over to the brick fireplace which had Christmas red and green stockings hanging and I noticed the milk and Oreo cookies that I had left Santa were still there. Also, the carrots that my brother had left for the reindeer had not been touched. I crept closer and closer to the brick fireplace. I heard a voice exclaiming, “Help! Help please!” I looked into the fireplace. It was Santa Claus.
Santa said to me, “Can you please get me out?” Just a minute Santa. I will get the butter and the elves to get you out. Your suit will get a bit slippery. Santa came tumbling out of the chimney. Santa exclaimed, “Thank you.” He gave me a teddy bear as a present.
Ho! HO! Ho! Merry Christmas!!
Anna,
You have included some excellent setting details. I also like your act is verbs like “crept and tiptoed”.
I would have loved more description of the elves and you greasing Santa up and sliding him out.
Great work!