Posted by sarap1415 | Posted in Language Arts | Posted on May 1, 2015
If I had the last Truffula seed I would keep it in a very safe place, like my jewelry box. After the Once-ler gave me the last Truffula seed I decided I would find the Lorax. I would start by searching for the little orange brown creature with a big yellow moustache. However, I couldn’t find him. I sat down on a huge rock. I thought how the Lorax flew out of the mushy pollution! I decided to do the same thing. There he was, the little orange brown Lorax! I asked him for help to clean up the once beautiful place filled with Truffula trees. I told the Lorax the Once-ler changed his mind and was saving one last Truffula seed, so this is why I required his help. The Lorax jumped up and cried, “YES!! OF COURSE I WILL HELP YOU!! LET’S GO!”
We arrived at the muddy pond where the Humming-Fish once hummed. We decided to start cleaning up the pond to help make the place look lovely again. We used a huge machine to suck up the muddy pond. After cleaning the pond, we planted the last Truffula seed. As the tree began to grow, the sky became a beautiful blue colour again, that shone on the Grickle-grass. The Truffula tree absorbed the mushy pollution. The Grickle-grass became green. More Truffula trees started to grow, as we planted the seeds that grew from the fruit.
The Lorax and I took excellent care of all the Truffula trees. The brown Bar-ba-loots returned and started eating the sweet fruits. More animals returned like The Humming-Fish and the Swomee-Swans. The Humming-Fish started to hum again in the pond, hmm, hmm, hmm. The Brown Bar-ba-loots were eating and singing sweetly. “You and I saved this beautiful place!” exclaimed the Lorax.
Great work, Sara! You understand a story has a beginning, middle, and end. You had some very creative ideas in your story! This is great to see! I like how you flew into the mushy pollution and located the Lorax to help you plant the last Truffula seed. Neat idea to use a machine to clean up the pond. I like how the animals began to return after the trees grew and absorbed the mushy pollution. Great idea to apply what you have learned in Science about trees. I could imagine and hear the fish humming in the clean pond! Fantastic use of vocabulary such as: sweetly, searching, beautiful, and required. I could tell you tried to be descriptive with your story! Nice job speaking for the trees in your story! Keep up the great work! 🙂