Posted by annagbds4 | Posted in Language Arts | Posted on March 5, 2014
This is my snowman that I made in art class. I hope you enjoy reading my snowman story.
One day a girl named Anna woke up and looked out the window. She was excited because it snowed. Anna got out of bed. She got dressed and put her purple snow pants and purple coat on. She quickly put on her purple boots. Anna was ready to go outside and started making a huge snowball. After that she made the second snowball and finally Anna made the last snowball. First she put the big snowball on the bottom, then the middle one and lastly the smallest one. Anna finished making her snowman. Anna went inside to get a carrot nose, two buttons for the eyes, a hat, and sticks.
When Anna put the final touches on her snowman named Christina, she heard a voice say, “Hi.” It was Christina.“Let’s go skating,” Anna declared. Christina was so chubby that she kept falling down. Christina got up and practiced for a bit and she could skate better. Anna and Christina skated around in circles, raced and danced. “Let’s skate around for a bit more before we go back to my house,” Anna commented.
When they arrived back to the house Anna and Christina had ice cold cocoa and cookies to eat. The cookies are in the freezer so Anna had to warm them up so they were not too frozen. The cookies and the ice cold coca were so delicious. “Let’s have more ice cold cocoa and cookies before we go have a snowball fight,”remarked Anna. “Yes please”, replied Christina. “Then I will have more too”, replied Anna. “Ready to go have a snow ball fight?” “Yes”, replied Christina. “First, I’ll make a shield”, replied Anna “Okay”, replied Christina. “Then I’ll to make a shield too,” replied Christina. “Ready?” asked Anna to Christina. “Yes,” replied Christina.“I got you.” replied Anna. “This time I will get you,” replied Christina. “Okay,” replied Anna. “Well it is getting dark so I will go in inside,” replied Anna. “Okay”, replied Christina. “Goodbye,” exclaimed Anna.
It was a warm Monday morning and Anna had to go to school. When school was over Anna went inside and had a snack. Anna looked out the window. Her snowman had melted away. She was sad.
The End
Nice job, Anna! Nice job adding detail on how Anna made Christina. I like the activities you did with Christina, but really work on showing rather than telling. Your story had too much conversation. It was great that you explained Christina melted because of the weather. Keep working hard! 🙂