Posted by jacobwbds4 | Posted in Language Arts | Posted on March 9, 2014
This is the paint roller snowman I made in Art class. I hope you like him! I hope you enjoy my story!
At 7:30 AM Jake looked out the window, but it was snowing. Jake put on his warm socks, pants, and his warm hat. Jake put on his coat, snow pants and lastly his scarf, and boots. Jake went outside and decided to make a snowman. First Jake made the large snowball, then the middle snowball, and lastly Jake made the small snowball for the head. After Jake built the snowman he went inside to get a carrot for his nose, two round chocolates for his eyes, and five round stones for his mouth. Jake decides to go inside to warm up after he put the final touches on his snowman. Jake thought he saw something moving as he headed back to the house to have some hot chocolate with marshmallows.
After his hot chocolate Jake went outside, but the snowman wasn’t there. Jake looked all around. He saw a snowman dancing all around his backyard.
Jake was shocked but quickly went to the garage to get his sled. Jake exclaimed to the snowman, “Want to go sledding?” “Yes I would love to,” exclaimed the snowman.” I’m going to call you Snowyow.” “Is that alright?” asked Jake. “What a creative name,” replied Snowyow. Jake and Snowyow had a great deal of fun having sled races, even though Snowyow thought it was a bumpy ride on the hills.
After sledding, Jake and Snowyow made a snow fort. They made sure it was just the right size for Jake and Snowyow. After they finished the snow fort they had a very big snowball fight. The snowball fight was Jake’s favourite thing he had done with Snowyow.
After the snowball fight it was time to have a rest. Jake made some cold hot chocolate and brought out some cookies for Snowyow and himself. Snowyow exclaimed to Jake, “Thank you so much. What a great idea to have cold hot chocolate so I don’t melt!”
The next morning Jake looked out the window and noticed that the sun was shining brightly. Jake ran downstairs as fast as he could, that he almost tripped. Jake ran to the door and opened the door so fast that the napkins on the breakfast table went all over the kitchen. When Jake opened the door he saw Snowyow had melted. He sadly went inside. Jake couldn’t wait until the next snowfall.
Good work, Jacob! You did a great job with your introduction, by describing what Jake wore and how you built Snowyow. A very creative name for a snowman! I enjoyed the activities Jake did with Snowyow. Sledding races sound like great fun! Keep working on adding detail and descriptive language. This will help you improve the interest of your story! I like how Jake was so upset about Snowyow melting, that he almost tripped and caused the napkins to fly off the table. This tells the reader how much Jake enjoyed having Snowyow as his friend! Keep working hard! 🙂